-Though I always got the basic gist of what you're trying to say, the text itself is still disjointed and bounces from topic to topic. Transitions between one paragraph and another (especially the one about girls in school and guys in prison) are jarring.
-Quoting others without saying where you got the quote from will always be awkward.
-Personal anecdotes detailing how you learned what you want to share with others would be welcome, and would give the reader more to latch on to.
-Some lines reek of ESL grammar, such as ''You're a piece of dead meat''.
- Mind my jumps from topic to topic. I'm not 'normal' in the psychological sense. I've got both ADHD and autism. ADHD scatters my attention into a ball bouncing everywhere, and it's hard to follow along with the leaps. And autism might lead me far more accurately than is interesting or necessary to anyone else. Learning to write well, that's how plan to control both better.
- When I should be direct or indirect? It's confusing. I hate the reply, "It depends", as I've read a lot I found helpful want to know what specific factors it depends on.
- And should I give sources, if I remember where I got them from? Sometimes it's a hunch or a synthesis where I thought of it, and I'm the source. In school, I got help from a special teacher for special students, as I was bad at both written and oral examinations and choked during them. A friend of mine told me that, people do not avoid me because of problems with my hygiene. He told me that others were afraid of me, as I had such a quick mouth that I could stab others in the back with icicles, and it looked like I wasn't even trying. Which I wasn't. That was incredibly confusing to me. Since when do boys in special classes talk that well outside of normal classes?
- English is my third language. I have Grammarly, for my sake and the ease of native English speakers.
Then find a way to work it into the article naturally. Look at Sam Kriss' writing if you want an example to follow, he's excellent at weaving punchy sentences into larger points.
"I haven’t met a man who is good with women, who says that he is good with women."
Uhu. Which is what Vox Day does. He even said this to Molyneux' face ("we both would not have trouble dating if he had to now"), to which Molyneux replied that he has been out of the "dating game" for so long that he does not know.
What you need to understand is that looks are subjective, that even the Bible teaches that it there are more important criteriia (Proverbs 31:28-31).
As Nils M Holm writes in "Bridging the Gap" (on http://t3x.org):
"Having a job that pays the bills helps to find your way in this world, and having a jobs that allows for some extras, like a new car, vacations in foreign countries, or maybe an own appartment, is seen as the ultimate goal by many. However, this can be a stale experience when you are always on your own. You may find a partner, but never feel any connection to them, because they do not share your interests, your values, your empathy, your sensitivity, etc. Many relationships of high-IQ people are uneasy compromises at best. The alienation they first felt at home and then at school and in later life extends also to their closest connections."
Even Chris Langan, who is way smarter than Vox Day by having an IQ in the range of 195-210, wrote:
"Right. As far as Germany is concerned, everyone is forever knocking the so-called “nazi stud farms” of the 1930’s and 40’s. But before one can even dream of doing this in any meaningful way, one must consider the alternatives available in the present reproductively degenerate environment … and we’re not just talking about genocidally replacing indigenous Europeans with maladaptive foreigners. (As I say, the situation here is nearly as bad. As one of the premier bouncers in New York, if not the best-known of all, I was nothing if not accessible to women. That I didn’t get any reproductive play on Eastern LI, where rich and pampered women abound, and that I simultaneously watched these decadent party girls having out-of-wedlock children by a succession of dunces, creeps, and minority players, is really quite informative when you come right down to it.) Truly, the Caucasian genome is in freefall."
My point is that successful bank robbers don't talk so much that they get spotted by the police. Yes, some men are good, and they say that they're good. And they are correct.
However, the guys who are successful can be good with women and keep quiet about it.
Thank you. I want to clarify how thoughts and talking the talk are so far away from walking the walk.
I've heard a lot about 'there are no eligible men to date' and guys talking about how there are men everywhere. And how he is single, but 'he should get it himself how undateable he is'.
Your writing needs work, Jasede.
I know. It's my first post on this substack.
You're welcome to go on how if you have any specifics.
-Though I always got the basic gist of what you're trying to say, the text itself is still disjointed and bounces from topic to topic. Transitions between one paragraph and another (especially the one about girls in school and guys in prison) are jarring.
-Quoting others without saying where you got the quote from will always be awkward.
-Personal anecdotes detailing how you learned what you want to share with others would be welcome, and would give the reader more to latch on to.
-Some lines reek of ESL grammar, such as ''You're a piece of dead meat''.
Thank you.
- Mind my jumps from topic to topic. I'm not 'normal' in the psychological sense. I've got both ADHD and autism. ADHD scatters my attention into a ball bouncing everywhere, and it's hard to follow along with the leaps. And autism might lead me far more accurately than is interesting or necessary to anyone else. Learning to write well, that's how plan to control both better.
- When I should be direct or indirect? It's confusing. I hate the reply, "It depends", as I've read a lot I found helpful want to know what specific factors it depends on.
- And should I give sources, if I remember where I got them from? Sometimes it's a hunch or a synthesis where I thought of it, and I'm the source. In school, I got help from a special teacher for special students, as I was bad at both written and oral examinations and choked during them. A friend of mine told me that, people do not avoid me because of problems with my hygiene. He told me that others were afraid of me, as I had such a quick mouth that I could stab others in the back with icicles, and it looked like I wasn't even trying. Which I wasn't. That was incredibly confusing to me. Since when do boys in special classes talk that well outside of normal classes?
- English is my third language. I have Grammarly, for my sake and the ease of native English speakers.
>point 3
Then find a way to work it into the article naturally. Look at Sam Kriss' writing if you want an example to follow, he's excellent at weaving punchy sentences into larger points.
"I haven’t met a man who is good with women, who says that he is good with women."
Uhu. Which is what Vox Day does. He even said this to Molyneux' face ("we both would not have trouble dating if he had to now"), to which Molyneux replied that he has been out of the "dating game" for so long that he does not know.
What you need to understand is that looks are subjective, that even the Bible teaches that it there are more important criteriia (Proverbs 31:28-31).
As Nils M Holm writes in "Bridging the Gap" (on http://t3x.org):
"Having a job that pays the bills helps to find your way in this world, and having a jobs that allows for some extras, like a new car, vacations in foreign countries, or maybe an own appartment, is seen as the ultimate goal by many. However, this can be a stale experience when you are always on your own. You may find a partner, but never feel any connection to them, because they do not share your interests, your values, your empathy, your sensitivity, etc. Many relationships of high-IQ people are uneasy compromises at best. The alienation they first felt at home and then at school and in later life extends also to their closest connections."
Even Chris Langan, who is way smarter than Vox Day by having an IQ in the range of 195-210, wrote:
"Right. As far as Germany is concerned, everyone is forever knocking the so-called “nazi stud farms” of the 1930’s and 40’s. But before one can even dream of doing this in any meaningful way, one must consider the alternatives available in the present reproductively degenerate environment … and we’re not just talking about genocidally replacing indigenous Europeans with maladaptive foreigners. (As I say, the situation here is nearly as bad. As one of the premier bouncers in New York, if not the best-known of all, I was nothing if not accessible to women. That I didn’t get any reproductive play on Eastern LI, where rich and pampered women abound, and that I simultaneously watched these decadent party girls having out-of-wedlock children by a succession of dunces, creeps, and minority players, is really quite informative when you come right down to it.) Truly, the Caucasian genome is in freefall."
My point is that successful bank robbers don't talk so much that they get spotted by the police. Yes, some men are good, and they say that they're good. And they are correct.
However, the guys who are successful can be good with women and keep quiet about it.
Thank you. I want to clarify how thoughts and talking the talk are so far away from walking the walk.
I've heard a lot about 'there are no eligible men to date' and guys talking about how there are men everywhere. And how he is single, but 'he should get it himself how undateable he is'.